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Mr Taylor
7:52
We are going to write a story together. Can you describe our starting setting.
Amelia
7:56
hello Mr Taylor
Mr Taylor
7:56
Hi Amelia. Can you describe the setting.
Roksana
7:57
the is a forest with trees and it,
Mr Taylor
7:57
Great. We are going to need great punctuation. Can you rewrite it correctly please.
Amelia
8:02
The forest is deep dark blue sky and it foggy like white clear powder .
Mr Taylor
8:04
Add your commas. How does it make you feel.
Roksana
8:04
It makes me feel shocked and it looks freezing.
Mr Taylor
8:05
Write your whole paragraph together. Add another line of description
8:10
Introduce your first character. What is she doing and whay is she there?
Amelia
8:12
The forest is deep, dark, blue sky and it foggy like white clear powder. It makes me feel scared because there might be a wolf hiding, and...it might come out and hurt me.There might bear and is massive and can eat me.
Mr Taylor
8:14
I like your fog description. Could you use a simile to improve it?
Roksana
8:15
There are trees and its windy with foggy and rocks
Amelia
8:16
I think she is her scary castle house and she looks like she is going to hurt someone. She looks as scary as a witch home  with green smoke and is about to hurt someone.
Mr Taylor
8:17
She meets a new character. What happens?
Roksana
8:17
I think shes a witch in a scary castle she is, evil and she might hurt some one.she looks as evil as a monster zombie and its  dark with, smoke.
Mr Taylor
8:18
Remember you are writing a narrative story. Remove I think.
Roksana
8:19
I will attack you little monster. said the witch
Amelia
8:20
they might go and be friends and go and attack someone and they will be a team and get someone and steal something.
Roksana
8:23
I will attack you little monster. said the witch.                                                                                                                                                 I will use my magic to make disgusting smell you witch.said the monster.
Mr Taylor
8:24
Can you put your speech marks in and find a synonym for said.
Mr Taylor
8:23
Rewrite your paragraph to tell what she is doing not might be doing.
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