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AvatarDavid Mitchell
1:11
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Jack Davey
10:22
Lovely sentence i will definitely use it on my writing!!!
Sachin
10:22
A good job! My favourite line is: as nice as this old man seems he is still a stranger.
Niamh
10:23
I like the word 'wearily', because it shows that the crew are exhausted after their adventures.
Kitty Wright.
10:23
I like the... wearily agree in this piece I think it is really suggesting that A
Miss Hall
10:23
I wonder if this would make more sense in the past tense. This would mean checking it through to see which words need to made past tense.
Lucy WRPS
10:23
I really like the suspense that this writer has made and the fact that i have lots of questions in my head right now. Great work! Keep writing
Niamh
10:23
I think the sentence is very interesting Pie i can never think of anything as good as that.
Max
10:23
It already feels like there is a story, intrigued to find out what happens next.
Mr Walker
10:23
I like the use of the word ‘wearily’ as it shows they are agreeing to go but tired or reluctant.
Diana
10:23
You have used positive and negative where you have said, "as nice as this old man is, he is still a stranger."  This is very similar to when we played Good News, Bad News.
Hannah
10:24
'Wearily' is a great word to use, it tells you a lot about the fact that they are tired, have done a lot that day and are exhausted.
Felicia
10:24
It was brilliant and I loved it.
AvatarDavid Mitchell
10:24
What did you like about it?
Bethany
10:25
I like that they know they're safe as long as they stick together because it shows that they have a bond between them.
James
10:25
The ideas are good. The use of wearily works well. There is a good lesson about not trusting a stranger - appearances can be deceptive!
Sarah
10:25
The sentence makes you wonder what the story is behind the team - why are they weary, who is in the team, where are they, who is the man? Great sentence to hook the reader.
Mrs Kilgour
10:25
'Wearily' gives us an immediate sense of how they are feeling.
Mrs Hughes
10:25
I wonder where they're going?  A super phrase to "hook" the reader.  Would it be correct to use a hyphen to create "one-another"?
Mrs McCalmont
10:25
I liked the way the reader could tell how the team was feeling by the use of the word wearily right at the start
Sachi
10:25
I  like how you have left the end of the sentance on a cliffhanger.
Niamh
10:25
The sentence is very mysterious Pie love it.
Charlotte
10:25
I like how you say 'as nice as the old man seems, he is still a stranger' because it is like a cliff-hanger as it is only one sentence.
Felicia
10:25
I think the sentence is great.
keerat
10:25
I like the sentence a you put the team wearily set of.
Sian
10:25
I like the descriptive use in the writing.
Benji
10:26
I like the word wearily it reminds me of being really tired.
Nikki
10:26
I want to find out more about the old man because you didn't tell us much about him.  You set up the mystery well.  Well done!
Davidson
10:26
The opening clause is intriguing. The team agree but only wearily. Are they physically tired or are they tired of the journey/quest?
Kitty Wright.
10:26
Yes sorry it is suggesting that maybe they were not going to agree if they were not weary.
Mrs Davison
10:26
I really like the way this sentence sets the scene and leaves me wanting more. I love the use of the word wearily , as I know that this is something complex and worth learning more about. The introduction of the 'old man' is mysterious and leaves me longing to read on.
Rose.W
10:26
John Williams original Star Wars music was the best.
Onora
10:26
I love suspense, that is what makes me want to read more
Isabella
10:26
It was amazing and I loved the word wearily !
charlie
10:26
I like the sentence (as nice as this old man seems- he is still a stranger.
Emma C
10:26
...'as nice as this old man seems he is still a stranger' is a good contrast between the man seeming nice but slightly scary.
Mrs Quantrill
10:26
I like how the word stranger keeps the danger a bit vague, creating suspense
Mr Sands
10:26
I looked at the present tense too - this has a different effect on the reader. It gives an immediacy and urgency to the narrative.
Hadley
10:26
In one well written sentence you have conveyed a feeling and given lots of detail and have chosen your words carefully.
Mrs Quantrill
10:26
I like how the word stranger keeps the danger vague and builds suspense.
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