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David Mitchell

10:27

Leah and Isabelle - I LOVE THAT SIMILE!!! You're making me think all is lovely and calm. This is perfect for what might happen next!

Sonya and Sienna

10:27

The calm ,glossy river rushed past the swaying trees .

Isla and alfie

10:27

The ice was terribly thin and blue as the ocean

Alexsia and Myah

10:27

We can see the white,soft snow brushing down the trees like a bear itching his back.

Jacob and Robert

10:27

The very white fog slithered over the calm trees.

David Mitchell

10:28

Jacob and Robert - I love the word 'slithered'! Now tell me about the water.

Murtadha and Kian

10:28

i can seeThe foggy wind whistling through the frozen air in the sky .

Aisha,Aleshia

10:28

I can see the white, cloudy fog reflecting off of the calm lake.

Martyna Hannah

10:28

The trees were reflecting into the ice water

Harry and Alan

10:28

The floppy, clean water was creating waves that flowed onto the land slowly as the snow,

Leah and Isabelle

10:28

The misty air covering the trees like a blanket of whiteness.

David Mitchell

10:30

Ben

10:32

Slowly the ice climbing the trees.

David Mitchell

10:32

Well done Ben!

Fearne Georgia

10:32

As the shiny white diamond snow falls into the cristle clear water

Jacob and Robert

10:32

The water wes as cold as ice

David Mitchell

10:32

Jacob and Robert. Can you think of a different simile to make it even colder?

Kai and Kyle

10:32

The glamorous,beautiful lake moving in calm,cool motion.

David Mitchell

10:33

Kai and Kyle - Glamorous and beautiful kind of mean the same. Which one is better?

Isla and alfie

10:33

The galaxy was beautiful as the 1000 stars in the gorgeous night sky above

David Mitchell

10:33

Isla and Alfie - That's great! Can you think of a different word to 'beautiful'?

Harry and Alan

10:34

We see a terrifying and horrible house burning as the grass, that was dry, was waving because the cold, fast wind was blowing into it.

David Mitchell

10:34

Harry and Alan - Try to start your sentences without 'We can see'. You could write:

Terrifying and horrible, the house was burning...

Alexsia and Myah

10:34

As the moon rose, it looked like the sun was bursting through the house windows and doors . #

Martyna Hannah

10:34

The scary dark sky was creeping up on me .

Kai and Kyle

10:34

The deserted house with no one in.As the white,bright moon shined as bright as a candle with the galaxy left corner.

Leah and Isabelle

10:34

The bright diamond like moon shining down above the burning house.

David Mitchell

10:35

Martyna and Hannah -I like how you have used 'creeping' to make me the reader a little worried!

Jacob and Robert

10:35

The dry green grass lies on the ground

David Mitchell

10:35

Jacob and Robert - Can you think of a simile to make it sound as dry as possible?

Sonya and Sienna

10:35

The beaming, bright moon is shining on top of the old, burning house .

Kai and Kyle

10:35

We think that glamorous is a better word than beautiful.

Amy and Weier

10:35

As I walked through the deadly battle field, I saw my lovely, wooden house erupting up in flames with hot, dangerous fire like a volcano bursting with flaming, burning lava.

Keehan and Codie

10:35

As i looked out my window,i saw the parched grass waving at me, while the breeze of the wind brushed through my hair.

David Mitchell

10:36

Keehan and Codie - I love the word 'parched'! make sure you use capital 'I' in sentences. Well done, you're doing great!

Jacob and Robert

10:36

the water was as cold as 40 degrees!

David Mitchell

10:36

Jacob and Robert - Don't forget your capital letters.

Isla and alfie

10:36

The galaxy was bright as the 1000 stars dancing in the sky above.

David Mitchell

10:37

Isla and Alfie - I love the word 'dancing'! Now describe the moon for me.

Aisha,Aleshia

10:37

As the moon just became full, the house started burning down like a bonfire.

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