JotCast | St. Gerrard's Live Writing Session

St. Gerrard's Live Writing Session

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Martyna Hannah

10:37

The wooden haunted house was as creepy as a giant monster

Murtadha and Kian

10:37

I can hear and see black , humongus wolf with a ferocious scar on his scary face .

Ben

10:37

As I glared at the house, I saw flames quickly appear like an asteroid.

Caleb and Colin

10:37

The huge Moon hovered over the burning, haunted house, as it burned the fire hissed like a fire-breathing dragon with fire bursting out of its mouth.

David Mitchell

10:38

Murtadha and Kian - Ferocious is a great choice of word well done! Now describe the moon for me.

Leah and Isabelle

10:38

The sparkling stars, with the milky way bursting through the night sky.

David Mitchell

10:38

Leah and Isabelle - Describe how that made you feel as if you were a character in this story.

Kai and Kyle

10:38

The deserted house with no one in. As the white, bright moon shined as bright as a candle with the galaxy in the top left corner.

Jacob and Robert

10:39

The brown grass was as dry as the saharan desert

Isla and alfie

10:39

As the Moon was shining its bright side was bringing the dancing stars to the night.

David Mitchell

10:39

Caleb and Colin

10:41

As the grass waved goodbye my house burned into flames.

Keehan and Codie

10:41

As I looked out my window,I saw the parched grass waving at me,while the breeze of the wind brushed through my hair.

Alexsia and Myah

10:41

As the icy cold moon rose in the stary night sky, it looked liked a ball of light was going to explode right infront of my bare shocked face.

Ben

10:41

The stars are shining like diamonds.

David Mitchell

10:42

Ben - I like that a lot! There's nothing more sparkly than diamonds, well done!

Leah and Isabelle

10:42

We would feel terrified because are only place was burning down.

Murtadha and Kian

10:42

I can see the bright moon hovering in the starry sky

Fearne Georgia

10:42

As the full moon, rises above the gloomy galaxy sky the lights come on. In the dark house.

David Mitchell

10:43

Fearne and Georgia - Well done! I like the use of alliteration there! Read it back, is your punctuation correct?

Isla and alfie

10:43

The walls was creeping threw the windows what had rust and dust on it I was petrified.

Martyna Hannah

10:43

As i was standing in the room , the wallpaper started to creep up on me .

Sonya and Sienna

10:43

My sweat started running down my face when I first entered the haunted house.

David Mitchell

10:44

Sonya and Sienna - Did it tickle? You could write that it tickled as it crept down your face.

Keehan and Codie

10:44

As I cautiously walked into the abandoned,burnt house,I could smell the filthy dust in the air.

Harry and Alan

10:44

While inside the house, the damp, old broken out window into an wooden area with a interesting book it also smelt like a piece of wood was burning into 10 pieces.

David Mitchell

10:45

Harry and Alan - I like the word 'damp'. Is stank better than smelt?

Murtadha and Kian

10:45

I can hear tiny little footsteps going around the house , and i realised that the house was infested with rats .

David Mitchell

10:46

Murtadha and Kian - Don't tell the reader it's infested with rats, make the reader think there is something not right. May be a glimpse of small shadow.

Kai and Kyle

10:46

As i walked in, to the smoky, dirty house I feared to move. When I looked over towards the wall I saw the wallpaper peeling of the wall. I could taste the horrible smoke running down my throat into my lungs making me cough.

Leah and Isabelle

10:46

As we entered our no longer house, as we were trembling we took deep breaths in and out then coughed a little flame.

David Mitchell

10:46

Leah and Isabelle - What do you mean by 'no longer house'. Can you explain that?

Keehan and Codie

10:46

can we change smelt to stank

David Mitchell

10:47

Keehan and Codie - Can you write it again changing the word for me?

Caleb and Colin

10:47

As I walked through my burnt house I could smell the smoke, I could taste the dust that came from the fire, i could feel the table and chair that was still hot, i could see the only things left which was the table and chair.

Jacob and Robert

10:47

It smells so bad i think i need to wear a gas mask

David Mitchell

10:47

Jacob and Robert - Don't forget to use a capital I for I. Can you see something missing at the end of your sentence?

Alexsia and Myah

10:47

As the fire died down, I thought I would go and take a look at the left overs of the old, abandoned, creepy house, I saw the peeling wall paper jump at my face that had been burnt with most of the house.

Amy and Weier

10:47

As I ran into my crumbling house, I felt a piece of dusty, warm wallpaper falling in my bare right hand, it turned into dust as it touched the centre of my hand, I smelt the stinky remains of my house which stank like mouldy cheese left outside the fridge for two weeks.

David Mitchell

10:48

Alexsia and Myah - Great sentence. What did it smell like?

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