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Miss Skinner
8:39
As night wove into day, the mist descended, shielding the forest from people's view.
Mrs Cumming
8:39
Your descriptions are fantastic!
Alicia🌹 and Emily💖
8:39
Yes Mr Brown!
Mr Brown
8:39
Rosie and Darcy I love your sentence, particularly the opening 'On a foggy night on a mystical island...'. However, you have left out a comma, maybe two, somewhere. Can you find where and write your sentence again?
Mr. Mitchell
8:39
Really glad to see you all thinking hard about your punctuation now - well done!
Mrs Faithorn
8:40
Hello everyone, some great descriptive ideas so far.
Bobby 😐🙄 Owain
8:40
In the distance there is a blanket of platinum mist hovering above the dense forest.
Mr. Mitchell
8:41
Just by changing that one word, you have made the sentence so much better!
Curtis Spencer🙊🙊
8:40
Eerily, the snowy fog is floating over the ice cold lake. In the distance the trees are swaying side to side from the strong wind what is almost as powerful as a tornado.
Mr Brown
8:40
Curtis, great to see your fronted adverbal.
Mrs Rathi
8:41
Bobby and Owain, well done, great improvement!
Bethany💙and Olivia😃
8:41
Majestically, the crystal river trickled with the howl of the wind.
Mr. Mitchell
8:41
I love the word 'trickled'! Now tell me more!
Mr Brown
8:41
*adverbial. Sorry about my spelling mistake.
Miss Skinner
8:41
❤Molly and Sophie ❤
In the icy fog, stands a crowd of dark green trees swaying in the powerful wind . - This is great but could you think of another way of describing the 'dark green trees'?
Oliver
8:42
The deserted forest sits in between the lake and a think fog that seems to cuddle the ferns.
Rosie & Darcy 😍
8:42
On a foggy night,on a mystical island,the fluffy clouds are drifting across the calm sea.
Mr. Mitchell
8:42
How did that make you feel?
Tianna and Grace🌹
8:42
slowly as the cloudy white fog travels by, the trees sway and the lake sits still.
Mr. Mitchell
8:43
Can you think of a better word for 'travels'? Or could you add an adverb?
Mrs Cumming
8:42
What kind of sound is your trickling river making, Bethany and Olivia? Would you be able to hear it over the wind?
Mr Brown
8:42
Rosie and Darcy you have added in the commas. Great work, well done!
Mrs Rathi
8:42
Curtis Spencer - I love the word eerily! Have a look at your second sentence and think about where to add punctuation
Miss Skinner
8:42
Rosie & Darcy 'On a  foggy night on a mystical island the fluffy clouds are drifting across the calm sea' Is there another word you could use instead of 'calm'?
Zak and James
8:43
Slowly the fog drifted past us so we could see the lush green trees
Leon and Max 😜😎
8:43
Quickly, the mysterious fog circles around the proud, tall trees, which stand on the edge of the mythical forest.
Mr. Mitchell
8:43
I think you could add a simile to that sentence. As quickly as what?
Mr Brown
8:43
Zak and James have a think about punctuation in your sentence.
Curtis Spencer🙊🙊
8:43
Ok we will make sure we will add punctuation (thank you)
Lauren and Adam
8:43
Just before nightfall, a dense mist kissed the tops of the forbidden forest.
Mr. Mitchell
8:44
LOVING that sentence! Really impressed with 'kissed'! Personification can add so much to a sentence. Now tell me more!
Miss Newark
8:43
Great descriptions of the actions of the lake and trees, Tianna and Grace.  What do we need to use at the beginning of every sentence?
Mr Brown
8:44
Would someone like to make a comment on my sentence?
Mrs Lee
8:44
That's an amazing sentence Lauren and Adam!
Mrs Rathi
8:44
Zak and James - lovely use of adjectives, well done. Can you see anything beyond the trees? Add it into your sentence.
Mrs Cumming
8:44
Oliver, did you mean 'a thick fog'? What word could you use instead of cuddle?
Zak and James
8:44
We will.
Alicia🌹 and Emily💖
8:44
The mystical island is gloomy and is not the place to be. The eerie fog surrounds you and howls in your ear. There is no place on this island where you wont be frightened.
Freya And Charlotte ✨
8:45
Mr. Mitchell,  the atmosphere is lightly scented with damp grass that comforted me.
Mrs Lee
8:45
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