JotCast | Year 5 Thursday 2nd April

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Lexie

11:34

Up in the sky two hot air balloons drifted across the savanna

Mr Fairhurst

11:34

You've missed a comma and a full stop. Could you correct this please?

Aiden G

11:34

As the sun turned the sky a warm yellow, our balloon drifted slowly home.

Mr Fairhurst

11:35

Loving the ideas so far. Now try putting a couple of great sentences together. Also, make sure you are including punctuation. Think about what could be seen from the balloon. Think about how the passengers might feel.

Alex

11:36

The big balloon floated across the vast land.

Shay

11:36

Across the dusty morning savanna there were colossal , hot air balloons Drifting into the gorgeous sunset.

Grace

11:36

In Africa, two huge hot air balloons where floating over the hot burnt grass and trees as the sun went down.

louis

11:36

I was soaring through the air as I felt the blazing hot desert sun shine down on me.

evie

11:36

The roten trees sat stil in the winter breas

Lily

11:36

Slowly, the large hot air balloons drifted across the vast savannah. As the giant hot air balloon flew, the mighty animals set off to the water hole.

Eva Wright

11:36

As the gigantic hot air balloon gracefully flew in the sapphire blue sky, the people glared down at the lush savanna.

Amelia

11:36

In the distance of the sunset sky, there are hot air balloons that are floating around the tranquil desert. The dark, green trees are swaying gently in the wind.

joseph

11:36

In the distance there are two hot air balloons, I wonder were their desternations will be .

matthew

11:36

Above the land, the hot air balloons were sitting on top of the misty clouds.

Mr Fairhurst

11:36

I love this Matthew.

Emilija

11:37

The beautiful yellow sun was setting whilst the people in the hot air balloons Watch the sun.

Jack

11:37

As the hot air balloons soured for the sky they casted dark looming shadows on the hard dry earth

Sylvie

11:37

As the hot air balloons past the the trees moved side to side swiffly .

Lexie

11:37

Up in the sky , two hot air balloons drifted across the savanna.

Aoife

11:37

The mighty hot air balloons towered over the dry desert.

Josh

11:37

The large hot air balloon was swiftly floating over the barren earth below

Eva Wright

11:37

These are all really good

Hollie Bond

11:37

The incredibly huge trees stood still like statues. They are dark green like green racing cars.

Mr Fairhurst

11:38

The next picture. It looks like things have taken a turn for the worse for the adventurers. Try to continue the story using an -ed or -ing opener.

Grace

11:38

The two men where very exited and nervous as they where getting close to the ground.

Luke

11:38

In Africa, some people were in hot air balloons watching the animals intensely and the trees were casting huge shadows over the mighty desert.

Amelia

11:38

In the distance of the sunset sky, there are hot air balloons that floating around the tranquil desert. The dark, green, lush trees are swaying gently in the wind whilst the clouds are gently moving across the sky.

louis

11:38

The animals struggled to find water in the roasting Africa sun

Hollie Bond

11:39

The hot air balloon was soaring through the air to a magical destination.

Grace

11:39

Unexpected, men found themselves on the hot grass. They had crashed...

Evie

11:40

unforchenetly the boloon fell from the sky and fell onto its side

Mr Fairhurst

11:40

Check the spelling of the first word Evie.

Emilija

11:41

The two people in the air balloon got very nervous to see the hot air balloon float down like a feather.

matthew

11:41

Trapped, the men tried to flee the hot air balloon when it went up in blazing flames.

Luke

11:41

Crashing down, the biggest hot air balloon had ran out of fuel and smashed into the ground below.

louis

11:41

Suddenly the vast hot air balloon came to a halt as the menacing birds strook and crashed on the hard rovky sand.

Jack

11:41

panicking the explorers tried relentlessly to get the hot air balloon back into the air

Mr Fairhurst

11:41

I love the idea. Can you correct your punctuation though?

Alex

11:41

The yellow balloon crash landed on a near by farm.The farmer was not happy.

Eva Wright

11:41

Unfortunately, the hot air balloon tumbled down to the hot depths of the savanna

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