JotCast | Year 5 Thursday 2nd April | 4/2/2020

Year 5 Thursday 2nd April

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Amelia

11:41

Crashing to the ground, the hot air balloon had finally reached its destination.

Jazmin

11:42

Suddenly their was a huge tearing sound the hot air balloon had ripped. They were no longer sat on the fluffy clouds

Mr Fairhurst

11:42

Good, I like how you used Matthew's idea in your writing.

Josh

11:42

What a disaster! The balloon,with all the people on board,fell from the ocean blue sky with a large thump.

Mr Fairhurst

11:42

I love the short dramatic opening sentece.

Sylvie

11:42

The colosell hot air balloon sat like towering billding .

joseph

11:42

Crashing down, the weight of the huge balloon parted the golden sand .

Lexie

11:42

Surprisingly , the hot air balloon came down from the sky and landed on the large field of grass

Hollie Bond

11:42

Unexpectedly, the hot air balloon fire was not as strong so it fell out of the sky quickly and very scarily.

Aoife

11:42

Panicing,the two men slowly drifted down on to the hot yellow sand.

Mr Fairhurst

11:43

Look who has arrived.

Aiden G

11:43

Drifting quickly towards the ground, I knew I was going to hit the sand and it wasn't going a soft landing.

Lily

11:43

As they started to head back, the blazing sun started to set. As fast as cheetahs, the explorers came back. Suddenly, the hot air balloon started to crash is to the glistening sand.

Jack

11:43

Panicking, the explorers tried relentlessly to get the hot air balloon back into the air.

Grace

11:44

As they turned around and started to walk,

Luke

11:45

Prowling through the savana the lions are tracking the smell of flesh

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Mr Fairhurst

11:45

This sounds ominous Luke.

Grace

11:45

the men found themselves surrounded by lions

Mr Fairhurst

11:45

Remember to include punctuation. What did they do? How did they feel?

Amelia

11:45

Worrying, the explorer ran for his life as the lions came closer and closer.

Sylvie

11:45

As the sun went down lionesses rome the land.

Lily

11:46

Out of the blue, a mighty, strong herd of lions appeared. The explorers froze. The mighty lion started coming closer and closer.

Alex

11:46

The Lions,strong and powerful,looked for prey.

Mr Fairhurst

11:46

I love that you used a relative clause sentence Alex. Well done.

Eva Wright

11:46

Disturbed by the landing, a pride of lions stared at the broken balloon what was ripped to shreds

Hollie Bond

11:46

It landed on it side and the explorer could see a huge pack of angry lion in the savanna.

Shay

11:46

Unexpected , lions in the distance crept closer as the nervous people were preparing for the misty darkness.

Evie

11:46

The hungry lions were lost and looking for a place to eat or maybe a person

Jack

11:46

Spotting the pack of loins the two men fled leaving the hot air balloon to burn

louis

11:46

Sunddenly a pack of blood thirsty,dangerousn cheatas arrived at the scene ready to attack there prey.

Josh

11:46

A pride of lions walking with determination to get their lunch stopped at the upturned balloon

joseph

11:46

Panicking, the explorers ran for their lives away from the prowling lions .

Mr Fairhurst

11:47

I'm loving read all your sentences. It's hard to keep up with them all. Keep it up. Make sure you are including commas. Not many of your sentences include conjunctions. Try to extend some sentences in the next part.

Grace

11:47

The men saw a big gap between two of the surrounding lions they had a chance to escape

Luke

11:47

I like all of them well done!

Mr Fairhurst

11:48

It looks like they might have found a way to escape.

Hollie Bond

11:48

When the explorer starred at the lions he was worried and not sure what to do.

Aoife

11:48

Oh no! The two explorers have caught some terrifying lion's attention.

matthew

11:49

Just when they thought they were safe they saw unmerciful lions staring at them.

Aiden G

11:49

Luckily, there was no broken bones, I stumbled from the balloon basket and felt the warm dry air hit me like a hair dryer.

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