JotCast | Year 5 Thursday 2nd April

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Josh

12:10

The submerged canoe is lying at the bottom of the river but they've managed to escape

Eva Wright

12:10

As they turned back, they realised the boat was ruined! What were they going to do...

Mr Fairhurst

12:10

Good sentences Eva. I like how you used an ellipsis.

matthew

12:10

The sinking boat that is full of water will not float again. No one knows where the two men are.

Hollie Bond

12:10

After falling down the water fall the explorer reach the bottom the boat stated to sink the explorer said"i am I strand Ed on this little island ".

joseph

12:10

The rusty tired raft is all alone, were are all the passengers? looking down the waterfall the people are hanging on to a thin tree abondoned in the water

Lexie

12:10

lukily ,they landed safely but the bout took the turn for the worst they didn’t know what to do.

Mr Fairhurst

12:10

Well done!

Mr Fairhurst

12:11

They've noticed something above. Could this be their chance to escape? (final picture)

louis

12:11

Im so lucky I wasn't on that boat im delighted that could have been a lot worse.

Luke

12:12

The men survived but they have no food, this is bad!

Shay

12:12

petrified, they cascaded down the treacherous waterfall. Crocodiles swam towards the terrified men.

Mr Fairhurst

12:12

Uh oh. WIll they escape? I love the -ed opener Shay.

Aoife

12:13

"Do you here that creaking noise?" asked one of the sailors. Suddenly the boat collapsed. what could happen next?

Hollie Bond

12:13

Hooray! Help is on its way

Mr Fairhurst

12:13

How will they get the planes attention so that it lands?

Amelia

12:13

Luckily, they could have another chance to escape! They have seen a bright yellow plane and it is flying across the African plans

louis

12:14

Suddenly a rescue plane flew above unbelievable I screamed with all my might could this be a great escape to go down in history.

Eva Wright

12:14

When all seemed lost, they found a plane and flew it to safety

Mr Fairhurst

12:14

I'm sure you could write a couple of sentences with more detail Eva. Use all your fantastic writing skills to write the ending.

Amelia

12:14

Luckily, they could have another chance to escape! They have seen a bright yellow plane and it is flying across the African plains. Could this be their lucky chance?

Lexie

12:14

Up ahead, they notice a bright yellow airoplane they have a chance to go back home.

Laila

12:14

We thought we where safe now and took a deep sigh of relief. But then as we turned the river bend there was a gussy waterfall, the current was to strong to turn around, our only option was to go over.

Alex

12:15

The men heard the roar of an aeroplane passing above them. They shouted at the top of their lungs for help! would they be rescued...

Grace

12:15

Then the men herd a strange noice it was not from an animal they looked up and a airplane was flying up ahead they yelled for help. Finally after shouting the plane landed. They were safe! Or were they...

Mr Fairhurst

12:15

Finish up your final sentences please. Consider how they could get the planes attention so that they can be saved.

Luke

12:15

The hungry men noticed somthing above, it's a plane. they screamed frantically in attempt to get there attention, it worked. they're safe. They are lucky!

joseph

12:16

Above their heads they could see a bright yellow plane,this could be their only chance of survival .

Mr Fairhurst

12:16

What will they do?

Sylvie

12:16

gliding thore sky the hellecopetr made its waito saffty.

Mr Fairhurst

12:16

Check your spellings Sylvie.

Lily

12:17

Suddenly, the stranded explorers saw a large, yellow plane. The poor explorers shouted louder then they ever had before. Thankfully, the small plane noticed them. They rushed over to the small plane and got in. They made sure to tell the pilot everything.

Aoife

12:17

They hear somthing its a plane! But there is one problem how do they get its attention?

Josh

12:17

The bright yellow plane is flying across the savannah has this got a curse to it to?what will happen to this?

Jazmin

12:18

As the man collapsed at the weight of his best freind . As he silently lay trapped under his pall he saw a yellow blur the man was so dehydrated he could hardly see. He screamed and screamed and screamed but he could not be heard. He had one more shot at it and suddenly his voice shot out and the men in the plane swooped down and took them home

Mr Fairhurst

12:18

I like how you built up the tension. The only improvement would be to avoid using 'as' as the opener for two sentences in a row.

Alex

12:18

It didn't work, the aeroplane disappeared into the frosted, white clouds. But then...they saw a floating flare gun on top of the water they fired it and...

Mr Fairhurst

12:18

Good idea Alex. Excellent use of ellipses.

Lexie

12:18

They question themselves , how will they get onto the airoplane?

matthew

12:18

Worried that they might not survive, the men walked until they heard the engine of a plane. They realised it might be able to see them. They started waving their arms but the pilot didn't notice them.

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