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Mahanoor

11:53

Eman and Abdullah - Well done for using 'The burning flames!' It makes you see how big the flames are!

MUBARRA AND SOFIA

11:53

I can see the moon gaze at me if I have done a big mistake.

Amberin and Devon

11:54

My mouth taped together, there was no way I was going to make it out alive. The noises of the kidnappers were audible from inside of the burning, sinister building.

Muhammad-Q and Sandor

11:54

This is madness he thought. I wish no one was in their when my cruel brothers set this on fire. But there was nothing that the lonely boy could do. Only to follow his brothers. His mother could never stop them.

Esa and Gift

11:54

Mariya B and Hussain- Can you think of a better word for filled

Breshna and Ahmad

11:54

The character might be stood still not knowing what to do by looking at the flaming house.

David Mitchell

11:54

Faiz and Saleeka

11:54

The abandon bungalow stood there on its own its sinster smile worse than ever. The scarlet , vermillion flames burned the inside of the house making him feel proud of what he had done

Raihan and Sajjad

11:56

The abandoned room was smashed to bits and the wallpaper was peeling itself off as slowly as a snail.

Zayan and Kulsum

11:56

The empty, ancient house had the walls destroyed by some violent beast with no reason to explain why it happened.

Esa and Gift

11:56

Faiz and Saleeka- Not abandon its abandoned but it is a great paragraph

David Mitchell

11:57

Zayan and Kulsum - Love this!

Amberin and Devon

11:57

The stench of the room was damp, the walls were covered in thick spider webs, peeling wallpaper and broken shards of glass.

Muhammad-Q and Sandor

11:57

A few years later, after they had put out the great ball of fire, the sorry boy went in to the burnt cottage. He felt a huge wave of sadness as he could not imagine how the owner felt.

Emily and Safa

11:57

We felt the stars guiding us through our way as we looked up at the moving moon we saw the mysterious house glowing from far away as we came closer and closer.

Esa and Gift

11:57

Raihan and Sajjad- great use of similies

Eman and Abdullah

11:57

The neglected and abandoned house was obliterate and creepy.

Zayan and Kulsum

11:57

"That looks creepy," said the strange voice from behind.

David Mitchell

11:58

Zayan and Kulsum - LOVE how you have included speech!

Rebeka and Ayesha

11:58

As the wrecked house, desolately stood the wallpaper slowly started to peel making an eerie noise.

David Mitchell

11:59

Rebeka and Ayesha - Could you play with this a little? What about:

Making an eerie noise, the wallpaper slowly started to peel.

Faiz and Saleeka

11:59

The dusty , dirty table stood there on its own hoping to be used again. The rusty , old fashioned chair stood there hoping to be seated on again.

Esa and Gift

11:59

Amberien and Devon- love the description

Mahanoor

11:59

Zayan and Kulsum - They way you used dialogue at the start really gives you the vibe!

MUBARRA AND SOFIA

11:59

I can see the ripped wallpaper as I feel the cold air shiver through me legs.

Muhammad-Q and Sandor

12:00

Surely they would have shed tears. He did an horrible thing. He should have stopped his brothers and their friends. HE COULD NOT BELIEVE IT!

Breshna and Ahmad

12:00

The empty broken house has been destroyed with no sine of unbroken things except the lonely chair and table.

Zayan and Kulsum

12:01

The neglected tables and chairs looked like they had been used once by studious children.

Faiz and Saleeka

12:01

"Sit on me " Screamed the chair .

Mahanoor

12:01

Faiz and Saleeka -

Fatima and Muhammad

12:01

The abandoned house stood damaged and slowly the wallpaper started to peel off.

Maariya , Ahad

12:01

The half ripped wall and broken windows are scattered on the dusty floor.

Eman and Abdullah

12:01

I was dead in the water when i realized this was my house...

Emily and Safa

12:01

As soon as we walked in all we saw were battered walls in every corner we couldn't escape from this tereturuse house!

Muhammad-Q and Sandor

12:01

He came out the house and ran he could not do anything!!

Raihan and Sajjad

12:01

As I slowly opened my eyes it instantly went to the red writing on the wall. Leave and never come back again or else...

Mahanoor

12:01

Mubarra and Sofia - The cold air making you shiver! That's a really good description!

Mariya B and Hussain

12:01

As I went inside the lonely building I noticed that the walls had been burnt and the smell of smoke had tingled my nose as the eerie building started to speak.

Esa and Gift

12:01

Breshna and Ahmed- A very effective and sinster description

MUBARRA AND SOFIA

12:01

I can hear the peeling wallpaper and realize I have done a big mistake.

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