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Freya And Charlotte ✨
9:02
Over in the long passageway, walls are constantly breaking, windows are being smashed. This is not a nice place to be.
Lauren and Adam
9:02
It would poison you.
Mr. Mitchell
9:03
Now add that to your sentence.
Mr Brown
9:03
Leon and Max, great to see you using a subordinate clause in the middle of your sentence. Could you go further and put yourselves into the building and describe what it's like to be in there?
Rosie & Darcy 😍
9:03
This looks like Victoria dark soul's hornted house, We  think  it smells like old rotten planks of wood that have fell down in the past years.
Mr. Mitchell
9:03
Great! Now write that as if it was in the story.
Mrs Rathi
9:03
Leon and Max, I love that you have thought about what you could here there too. Write another sentence describing the smells.
hear - sorry!
Freya And Charlotte ✨
9:04
Miss Skinner, no, darkness doesn't need a capital letter.
Tianna and Grace🌹
9:04
As I walked into the abandoned asylum, I could smell the scent of cigars, which suggested that I was not alone. The floor was damp and small puddles had been collected in parts. The walk was made unnecessarily difficult by the broken pieces of wood that had collapsed from the ceiling above.
Mr. Mitchell
9:04
I love this Tianna and Grace! Were there any other clues that you weren't alone?
Bobby 😐👻 Owain
9:04
It was like a scene of a horror movie and I had a feeling that something bad was going to happen.
Mr. Mitchell
9:05
Did your breathing change? Did sweat start to drip down your forehead? Tell me more - I like this!
Zak and James
9:04
The hallway is scary  , crumbly and scruffy; it has been left abandoned for centuries.
Leon and Max 😜😎
9:05
As I slowly crawl along the crumbling corridors, my footsteps echo for miles. The damp hallways are never ending like a maze.
Mr Brown
9:05
Zak and James what type of person do you think could have lived there centuries ago?
Curtis Spencer🙊🙊
9:05
The underground rusty old pathway to death, wreaked as if all of the poo on a farm was mixed together. The walls feel damp as if it has not been touched for centuries.
Bethany💙and Olivia😃
9:06
The creaks will give you the chills as the walls crack without a second thought. But you need to be careful, the rotten smell may kill you with one sniff.
Mr. Mitchell
9:07
Try to write that slightly differently like it was in a story. What about:

As I took diminutive steps forward, the creaks chilled me to the core. Without warning, the walls began to crack.
Mrs Cumming
9:06
Great, Zak and James! What does it smell like? Think about all of the senses you might use if you were there.
9:07
Leon and Max, are you crawling as in going slowly, or on your hands and knees?
Mr. Mitchell
9:08
Your last image is about to be displayed. Let's have a great ending with some sensational description. I want you to think about if you were the main character, how would you be feeling here.
9:09
Alicia🌹 and Emily💖
9:09
This wrecked and ruined house home of the 4 spirits that used to roam the halls of this Victorian aged mansion. The toxic smell of sewers drifts through this once beautiful home. The walls were plastered so nicely but now they feel like a hedgehogs back.
Bobby 😐👻 Owain
9:09
I went from a bit worried to A WHOLE NEW LEVEL of worried, my heart started pounding, I was struggling to breathe and when I felt something touch my shoulder I jumped out of my skin.
Leon and Max 😜😎
9:09
No we are using are feet as we explore the haunted building.
Zak and James
9:09
The aroma is in and out; it was  smelling like death.
💖Stevie and Lexie 💖
9:10
I could hardly make out what was ahead of me. Using only the tips of my fingers to guide me forwards,  I  could feel the rough, uneven and damp walls.
Mr. Mitchell
9:11
I really like that! How did that make you feel?
Leon and Max 😜😎
9:11
I would feel frighted because I might get burnt from the lava
Mr. Mitchell
9:12
Describe how it would make you feel in a way where you don't tell the reader you are frightened. When someone is frightened, they may start to breathe quickly or stand still? Describe it in a way like that for me.
Mr Brown
9:11
Leon and Max, me too! Try to rewrite your sentence as if you were really there.
Lauren and Adam
9:12
As the explotion explodes all
Freya And Charlotte ✨
9:12
In very big danger, the volcano erupted lava and smoke right in front of my eyes! The smell of burning and all this danger i was facing, made me petrified.
Bobby 😐👻 Owain
9:12
I went wondering, only to find myself to an irrupting volcano! I stumbled to my feet and tripped, I felt the floor rumble and lava spit out.
Mr. Mitchell
9:13
Wondering or wandering?
Freya And Charlotte ✨
9:12
I would be so, so worried at this moment in time. a volcano erupting in front of me!
Bobby 😐👻 Owain
9:12
I caught a whiff of the air and realized this wasn't just one irruption it was more.
Mr. Mitchell
9:13
How bad was the smell? Describe what it did to your face when you smelt it?
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